"The Wolf" Screenplay

[minihaymanz]

seems okay...
im not that great at writing scripts, but this seems good. interesting

[reverend_kyle]

Is this a movie you are writing?

[Truman]

It's written like a movie, yes.

[Boxcutta]

Let me know if you're ever going to share any of the Star Trek erotic fan fiction you've no doubt written.

[Truman]

Is that a joke, or just sarcasm?

[OwlLawyer]

I know someone who might want to produce this.

[Boxcutta]

Is that a joke, or just sarcasm?

On the contrary, I take my Star Trek erotic fan fiction very seriously.

Would you be so kind as to share some of your work?

[Truman]

I don't write that kind of stuff, and it makes me feel creeped out just talking about it. You go ahead and ask some other members who might write what you ask of me. I'm not a fan of Star Trek, nor a fan of erotic fan fiction.

I know someone who might want to produce this.

What do you mean?

[Truman]

Anymore opinions so far before I post the 5th part of the screenplay?

[Machiavelli]

It's good.


That's my opinion.

[Boxcutta]

I can barely contain myself.


Oops. I couldn't. Does anyone have a towel?

[HighBorn]

Well writtien and thought out... this just came as a insperation from music... was it flight of the valkries..lol.. but really i like it so far good work

[Truman]

It was from "The Mummy" soundtrack. I love that movie.

Ok, that's enough opinions. I know a few of you want to get on with the story, so here's part 5.

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Part 5

Cuts to the two prisoners running out of the tent quietly; they get to another prisoner tent, making sure the 2 guards there are asleep first; they aren't

The two prisoners go to the back of the tent and enter behind the guards' backs

Prisoners start to strangle the 2 guards; there is a big struggle, but no noises are made; the guards finally choke and die quietly

The two prisoners start undo the 4 other prisoners' shackles with the guards' keys

The two other prisoners motion for them to follow them

The prisoners run out quietly and go to another tent with prisoners

Cuts back to Hestram and the wolf in the tent

Darus/Wolf: My armies always have a few people who escape and free the other prisoners. They usually take over in the end.

Hestram: I doubt they're doing anything like that. My guards are as watchful as....as guards.

Cuts to 4 sleeping guards who are stabbed instantly by four prisoners, while hardly a sound is made

Cuts to showing about 60 prisoners running quietly through the camp and into other tents to free fellow prisoners

Changes shots between tents which have prisoners running out quietly

Cuts back to Hestram and the wolf

Darus/Wolf: How far away are we from the prisoner tents?

Hestram: Oh we're a long way off.

Darus/Wolf: What if it does happen, Hestram? What then?

Hestram: I assure you, Darus. Nothing is going to happen! My guards have it under control.

Cuts to the prisoners (about 2,000 2,500) beginning to kill the guards who are trying to fight back

Cuts to Hestram and the wolf who hear the battle noises and go out of the tent

Hestram: (looks ahead to see the prisoners killing the guards about 700 feet away from the soldiers' camp) My god!

Darus/Wolf: What do we do?!

Hestram: SOLDIERS!!!! MEN!!! WE'RE UNDER ATTACK!!

Cuts to the lieutenant getting out of his tent fast

Lieutenant: What! What is it?!

Lieutenant looks at the prisoners attacking the guards; slowly starts to run away back through the camp yelling orders and spreading the news

Hestram begins to run toward the prisoner camp

Darus/Wolf: Where are you going?!

Hestram: Wait here! I've got an idea!

Hestram runs for about 16 seconds, with the camera changing shots between him running and the fighting prisoners

Hestram finally reaches the other camp and finds a sword laying on the ground next to a fallen guard, picks it up, and runs through the camp

After about 3 seconds of running he encounters a prisoner who attempts to strike him while he runs but Hestram parries the blow and bangs it out of his hand

Hestram strikes the right side of the prisoner, thrusts it through him, and parries a blow from his side instantly

Hestram parries 2 more times and slashes the prisoner's chest, then looks around and looks at a tent about 40 feet away

Hestram starts running toward the tent which takes 2 seconds, but before he enters is attacked by a screaming prisoner who attempts to strike Hestram, but Hestram ducks just in time and thrusts his sword through him to which the prisoner screams in agony

The two prisoners from the beginning see him and run at him yelling, and are about to slash him but Hestram side-steps and they stop on either side of him, then try to thrust their swords into him but he back-steps and they kill each other

Hestram chuckles a bit gets inside the tent, and finds the commander still in shackles

Hestram cuts the leg shackles with his sword in one blow, and picks him up

Hestram: Time to go!

Hestram pulls him out with the sword to his neck and the prisoners notice this, to which a chain reaction goes around and they all stop and run to where their captured commander is

Hestram: Don't come any closer or your commander will pay! I am King General Hestram of the Terrec army and kingdom! I command you to lower your weapons!

Prisoners look at each other

Hestram: Do it!! (threatens the commander a little more)

Hestram: (talks normally to the commander) Tell them to lower their weapons, commander.

Commander: Bring down your weapons, men!

Prisoners hesitate

Commander: (gets threatened a bit more by Hestram) LOWER THEM!

Prisoners drop their weapons as Hestram's soldiers arrive just in time to hold all the prisoners

Wolf runs up to Hestram, and looks menacingly at the commander

Hestram releases the commander to a soldier who comes to hold him for him

Hestram: (begins to walk slowly; wolf follows) Soldiers of Falahas! Your king has returned. Darus is safe in my care, and he will reclaim his throne.

Cuts to prisoners looking angry

Hestram: I will stop at nothing to help him, and I will become his ally in the end! You have all heard that he was changed to a wolf; and here he is, as fierce as a mighty storm! (wolf growls at prisoners)

Hestram: He has asked allegiance from your commander and he refused, forcing us to lower your number in men, and eventually coming to this situation. Darus?

Darus/Wolf: What?

Hestram: Do you have anything to say?

Darus/Wolf: Oh, yeah. Fellow men!

Cuts to prisoners being astounded that the wolf can speak

Darus/Wolf: Pytor has corrupted everything I have brought up in the kingdom! My wife! My guards, my armies, my generals... my castle is twisted and turned to that of a house of horror!

Random Prisoner: But you said that we must flee Hestram! You coward!

Darus/Wolf: I never spoke this! As I said, Pytor has corrpted, lied, and brought the entire kingdom against me in order to take rule for himself! Don't follow a tyrant who is bound to bring death to you all!

Prisoners look at each other

Cuts to one prisoner with tears in his eyes

Cuts to commander

Commander: (to the soldier holding him) Let go!

Hestram: Let go of him officer.

Commander gets out of the soldier's grip and walks about 5 feet

Commander: Men! Darus has shown us all how Pytor has lied to us about him, and has deceitfully taken control. Darus has proved that he is not a coward, but a powerful leader. I stand by him!

Goes over to stand next to Hestram and the wolf

Random Prisoner: I follow Darus! (struggles and escapes the soldier's grip)

Soldier with longbow is about to shoot him

Hestram: Hold that arrow!

Soldier looks at Hestram and slowly lowers his weapon to his side

Prisoner runs up next to the wolf

Prisoner: I will follow you for as long as I live, my King. Please accept me and forgive me for doubting you. (bows)

Darus/Wolf: You are forgiven.

Prisoner looks up and smiles; prisoner stands and looks toward the crowd of prisoners

Hestram: Who's with us?

Prisoners look at each, then Hestram

Random Prisoner: I stand by my king!

Another Random Prisoner: Long live Darus, the King!

Crowd: Darus!

Crowd repeats the name of Darus

Cuts to Hestram smiling, and looking down to the wolf who's looking at the crowd, his eyes widened

Cuts to Hestram and the wolf walking back to their tent through the crowd

Hestram: Well, you've won over your troops; we'll have a bigger army now, about 9,500 compared to our 7,000 we had after the battle. That's a lot of prisoners we took. Who would've thought they'd fight with us in the end...

Darus/Wolf: Another step towards my revenge.

Hestram: Revenge? You said nothing about reven--

Wolf interrupts

Darus/Wolf: Against Pytor.

Hestram: Oh...Oh yes, Pytor. Him. I thought this was about regaining your kingdom, not just Pytor.

Darus/Wolf: My kingdom matters as much as my revenge against Pytor who started this thing.

Hestram: Vengence and your kingdom are not equal. Trust me. My wife burned all my battle coats when she got drunk when she started complaining about my campaign I was planning, and I didn't kill her in return.

Darus/Wolf: What did you do?

Hestram: I burned a pair of boots she got from a friend, and she cried the entire night afterward.

Darus/Wolf: And what's harmful in that, compared to what she did?

Hestram: She was told those shoes were her grandmother's. She didn't know that they were really some shoes her friend picked up from an executioner's most recent kill.

Darus/Wolf: A pair of shoes doesn't explain why she would go into that kind of rage. Why would she weep?

Hestram: She was drunk! Wouldn't you?

...

Darus/Wolf: I think we should change the subject.

Hestram: To what?

Both reach tent and enter; cuts to them inside

Darus/Wolf: Who do you think that "Gildur" is?

Hestram: Gildur? I really don't know. Maybe he doesn't exist. Maybe he's many people at once. Maybe he's just a legend; a ghost. Maybe--

Wolf interrupts

Darus/Wolf: Hestram, let's change the subject again.

5 seconds later...

Hestram: Maybe he's an idol and everybody worships--

Wolf interrupts

Darus/Wolf: The subject, Hestram!

Hestram: All right... I've been thinking, why don't we stop at the abandoned forts first. I mean, we'll have any information gathered before we fight, and there's that small chance of our defeat. What do you think?

Darus/Wolf: (begins to make himself comfortable in his place to sleep) I think that you should make your own decisions. You're a general, and a king.

Hestram: I have advisors, Darus. I like to know someone else likes my idea. So tell me, what do you think?

Darus/Wolf: (thinks) It's a good plan, but how would we attack Gildur, since we would be at its back-side? The other two abandoned forts are behind it, and it'll take much sneaking to get to them without being seen.

Hestram: True... We'll just go around it in the far distance at night. That'll hide us.

Darus/Wolf: Good point.

...

Darus/Wolf: Well, I'm off to sleep. It's been a long night.

Hestram: Yeah.

Hestram gets on his bed and lays down, hands above his head

Hestram: Rest well, Darus.

Both adjust in their beds and sleep; camera fades to black

Next scene opens with the same blackness: no picture

Voice: Commander!

...

Voice: Commander!

Blackness slowly opens up like eyes which show a black and white picture of the open tent door with the lieutenant

Cuts to showing the wolf with his eyes open but still laying on the floor

Lieutenant: Commander!

Cuts to Hestram slowly opening his eyes; cuts to the wolf getting up and yawning, showing his sharp wolf teeth

Hestram: (sleepy talk) What. What is it.

Lieutenant: Commander, I'm going to rally the army. We've got about 9 and a half thousand men and we're attacking Gildur.

Hestram: Change of plans.

Hestram begins to get out of bed

Hestram: We're aiming for the 2 behind it.

Lieutenant: What if we're seen?

Hestram: (out of bed) We're going around it from a far distance. They won't see us.

Lieutenant: So, the abandoned first, then Gildur?

Hestram: Correct.

Lieutenant: I'll alert the men.

Lieutenant leaves, shutting the tent door

Hestram gets up on his feet

Hestram: (starts putting his uniform coat on) Nice sleep?

Darus/Wolf: Yes, thank you. And you?

Hestram: Until the commander came, yes.

Wolf chuckles

Cuts to Hestram and the wolf coming out of the tent, Hestram ready to go

Darus/Wolf: (looks out at the army getting ready) Where's the lieutenant?

Hestram: (looks for a bit; points) There.

Cuts to a long distant shot of the lieutenant giving orders to a man at a tent

Cuts back to Hestram

Hestram: The army'll be ready in a moment.

Darus/Wolf: How can you tell?

Hestram: Mostly uniforms. (cuts to particular long-shots of men in uniform walking around)

Hestram: (points) Look.

Wolf looks in Hestram's direction

Darus/Wolf: My men.

Hestram: All in full uniform, too. Good discipline.

Darus/Wolf: But bad formation. They have no idea what to do.

Cuts to Darus' soldiers; shows one looking around, confused

Hestram: I'll tell the lieutenant.

Cuts to Hestram running towards the lieutenant and saying something to him; cuts to the wolf watching

Cuts back; the lieutenant begins to run over to the prisoner's camp and

Hestram runs back to the wolf

Hestram looks down at the wolf

Hestram: Are you ready?

Wolf nods once

Both start jogging towards Hestram's horse

Hestram stops

Hestram: Wait! One more thing I've got to tell the men.

Darus/Wolf: When will you finish?

Hestram: It'll take a while. Just wait.

Cuts to the wolf watching Hestram go off toward the camp; wolf notices the lieutenant going into his tent; wolf looks into the direction to where they're going

Camera slowly changes from the shot of the wolf looking into the distance, to the army riding through the land, showing Hestram at the front with the wolf by Hestram's side, not on his horse

Cuts to Darus' army walking within Hestram's, with every white cap representing one of Darus' soldiers

Hestram: (looks over his shoulder, then down to the wolf) I think your men have gotten pretty excited when joining with you.

Wolf looks back; cuts to one of Darus' soldiers marching with is knees going up and down from with a big smile on his face

Cuts to the wolf looking back and turning his head up towards Hestram

Darus/Wolf: Maybe a little too excited.

Cuts to late sunset (almost completely dark) with the army below the camera shot

Cuts to Hestram riding; then after 4 seconds holds up his hand and the army stops

Hestram looks ahead; cuts to a big castle with torches lighting it up; cuts to Hestram's view of it: it's far away; cuts back to Hestram

Hestram looks at the sun setting for 10 seconds and it finally gets very dark

Hestram motions his hand left and starts riding left; cuts to showing the army going left as well

Camera slowly changes from that shot to another showing the army riding; cuts to a view showing that Hestram successfully made it around the fortress without being seen; cuts to Hestram riding for 3 seconds and then holds up his hand; army stops

Hestram holds his finger up high and motions toward himself with it; the lieutenant comes riding up

Hestram: Where are the other forts?

Lieutenant: The spies reported they're about a mile away from Gildur, and a mile apart. They're abandoned, so no torches. We have torches with us, but unlighted as you ordered.

Hestram: I'll figure something out.

Lieutenant rides back to his position

Hestram holds up his hand and makes a big motion with it going forward;
army begins to follow Hestram

Camera slowly changes from that shot to a shot of the dark abandoned fort

Cuts to the wolf walking; cuts to Hestram riding slowly on his horse for 6 seconds; Hestram holds up his hand and army stops; Hestram holds up his finger and signals toward himself

Lieutenant comes riding up

Lieutenant: What now, commander?

Hestram: Bring the torches, I'll light them.

Lieutenant: But how?

Hestram: I've got an idea.

Hestram rides up to the fort, gets off his horse and sits down on a step from the stairs leading to the door; the wolf runs to him

Darus/Wolf: I remember this fort...This is Castle Reggata! This used to be my royal map fortress.

Hestram: Perfect! We'll find out your castle and the the fort we're about to attack.

Darus/Wolf: The maps were moved, Hestram.

Hestram: There are bound to be some extra maps they left behind.

Darus/Wolf: That's true.

...

Darus/Wolf: The reason we abandoned it was for lack of structure fortification. See these stairs?

Hestram: (nods) Yeah, stairs would lead to an unstable entrance, one that can be broken into frequently just by finding a place to dig into the tunnels under the fort, where any valuables are kept. Every fortress with stairs has underground chambers.

Darus/Wolf: That's why we left it.

Cuts to a long view of Hestram and the wolf and the dark fortress behind them

The lieutenant comes with all the horses carrying the torches

Lieutenant: How do we light them, commander? There's no wood nearby.

Hestram gets up and walks over to the lieutenant; the wolf follows

Hestram: Darus.

Darus/Wolf: Yes?

Hestram: Remember how I told you I traveled to Chu to get that crossbow?


Darus/Wolf: Yeah?

Hestram: I got something else as well.

Hestram pulls a long piece of bamboo out of his belt, which was hidden under his uniform coat; Hestram sticks it in the sand, pulls his sword out, and slashes it down the middle

The lieutenant looks at Hestram in astonishment

Hestram takes his knife out and takes one of the bamboo sticks; Hestram begins to cut the curved part off one of the halves which takes about 6 seconds, during which the lieutenant and wolf look at each other at one point

Hestram gets up, takes his knife, then takes some of the lieutenant's hair in his hand and cuts it off

Lieutenant: What are you doing?!

Hestram: Wait.

Hestram takes the curved half and puts it on the ground in front of him, the hollow part upward, then balls up the hair in his hand, and puts it the
bamboo hollow

Hestram takes his knife and cuts a line where the hair is, then takes the other flat half of the bamboo and starts sawing over the the hollow bamboo with the hair under the saw

Camera close-up shows bits of bamboo dust falling off the hollow onto the hair

Darus/Wolf: Hestram, what are you--

Hestram interrupts

Hestram: Quiet!

Cuts to close-up of the hair which begins to smoke; smoke starts to rise

Hestram: Lieutenant, quick!! Get me a torch!

Lieutenant gets a torch out of a pack on a horse next to him and gives it to Hestram

Hestram takes the torch quickly and holds it over the smoke while still sawing, Hestram's foot holding the hollow bamboo in place

Hestram blows the smoke for 3 seconds and the hair catches fire;
Hestram holds the torch closer to the bamboo and it catches fire and
lights all over

Lieutenant: Amazing!

Darus/Wolf: Fire!

Hestram: Get me the other torches.

Cuts to about 24 men slowly going up the stairs to the fort with lighted torches

Cuts to Hestram, the lieutenant, and the wolf walking together slowly in the crowd up the stairs to the abandoned fort...

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Opinions?

--Truman

[Truman]

I'd like to write the whole thing, if you guys don't mind, but I need opinions to make sure. Come on, people! Opinions

[strike wolf]

How many times do I have to say it? It's good.

[hawkeye]

i read a little bit its insanely good and ur writing this it should be made into a movie when ur done im gonna read the whole thing

[Boxcutta]

When do Captain Kirk and Spock disrobe and caress each other? Is it coming up soon?

[hawkeye]

i just read the whole thing its awesome

[Truman]

How many times do I have to say it? It's good.

I meant opinions on how the story is so far every time I update. I'll take that as "It's good so far."

i read a little bit its insanely good and ur writing this it should be made into a movie when ur done im gonna read the whole thing

Lol.

When do Captain Kirk and Spock disrobe and caress each other? Is it coming up soon?

Box, get a lifel; it's not funny, and yes I can take jokes. But this is just getting stupid and weird. I've already been informed about you and your other mustache friends. So either shut up, read the story, and give your opinion, or leave please.

i just read the whole thing its awesome

So, this is your real opinion, or are you just getting jittery again?

[hawkeye]

its amasing if it was made into a movie id buy it

[Truman]

I keep reading the reviews for "The Mummy Returns," which is very similar to this, and the critics say stuff like, "The Mistake: A plot that only ties together an overdose of special effects and action sequences."

Is this a little like that so far?

[strike wolf]

Not really. Besides critics are always wrong like only giving the 1st two LOTRs 3 stars, but the 3rd 4 stars.

[Truman]

Well, I'll continue then with part 6.

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Part 6

Hestram: Lieutenant.

Lieutenant: Yes?

Hestram: This fortress has stairs. Do you want to try to go under rather than over?

Darus/Wolf: That's a good idea.

Lieutenant: I should stay with the men.

Hestram: You do that, Lieutenant; I'll go with Darus.

Hestram and the wolf start back through the crowd down the stairs and arrive at the side of the stairway; this takes 8 seconds

Darus/Wolf: Hestram, what's the Lieutenant's name? You always call him "Lieutenant."

Cuts to Hestram looking on the stairwall and seeing a spot of brown, then moves his torch downward and looks to see a whole blotch of brown, and dried drippings from that point; Hestram moves his torch around that point and sees other blotches of brown on the stairwall

Hestram: Blood.

Darus/Wolf: What?

Hestram: On the wall.

Darus/Wolf: (looks at wall) Oh. Probably from a battle, or someone was murdered here long ago. No matter.

Hestram: (mumbles) There could be a passage here...

Darus/Wolf: Hestram? What's the lieutenant's name? You said you'd reveal it soon.

Hestram: Do you need to know?

Darus/Wolf: Yes!

Hestram: He's my lieutenant! I'll tell his name later, when the time's right.

Hestram: I wonder if there's a passage somewhere, so we don't have to dig. Do you know of any?

Darus/Wolf: I was never told of any passages, but that doesn't mean there isn't one. I was almost certain I knew my castle, but I was to taken to a secret room I had never seen, where I drank that liquid.

Hestram looks at the stairwall closely and sees to small fingerprints of blood on a brick sticking a little more outward than the others; Hestram puts his finger on it

Darus/Wolf: What's that?

Hestram feels around the brick and pushes it to which a small hole opens up like a rock moving out of the way of a cave entrance; Hestram brings his torch down to that area quickly and looks inside with the wolf looking with him; Hestram sees a skeleton lying about a foot away from the entrance

Hestram looks closely at the skeleton's clothes

Hestram: Pirate.

Darus/Wolf: He must've gotten in with the lever but it closed in on him.

Hestram: No...

The wolf looks at Hestram in confusion

Hestram: He was forced in.

Darus/Wolf: How can you tell?

Hestram: Look at the blood marks all over the wall. (moves his torch along the wall)

Hestram: My guess is we'll find more inside.

Hestram leans on the wall next to the opening which triggers another opening and a skeleton instantly falls out onto the wolf

The wolf moves out from under the skeleton as fast as possible and both look at it laying there

Darus/Wolf: This place is piled with corpses!

Hestram gets on his knees and inspects the skeleton

Hestram: Another pirate. We better get inside and search the area for any more.

Darus/Wolf: Why?!

Hestram: They're bound to lead us to something!

Cuts to the Hestram crawling in and the wolf coming after; Hestram lifts his torch and looks around; camera shows a long view of the wolf and Hestram in the room with the torch

Cuts to short view of Hestram and the wolf starting to walk slowly through the room

Camera shows the torch light moving onto a stone table with three scrolls and a skeleton sitting on a chair, head and arms on the table

Hestram and the wolf run over to the table and Hestram inspects the clothing while the wolf gets up on the table to try and unroll the scrolls by biting and clawing

Hestram: It looks like the only dead men here are pirates. You didn't do too well of a job guarding, did you Darus?

Darus/Wolf: Help me unroll these.

The wolf moves aside and Hestram removes the wooden cylinder that keeps the scroll rolled; Hestram opens it up and holds the torch light closer to show what's on it

Cuts to Hestram's face in wonder; cuts to the scroll again

Hestram: It's a map of a castle!

Camera moves across the map showing it to be a floor map

Darus/Wolf: My castle.

Hestram glimpses at the wolf and back at the map

Darus/Wolf: That must be the secret room I was taken into. (points at the spot with his paw and camera shows it)

Hestram puts the map down, finds 2 rocks and puts them at the ends of the scroll to keep it open, and opens up another scroll

Hestram: Darus, what's this one?

Darus looks at it and squints his eyes

Darus/Wolf: I don't know; maybe the other abandoned fort.

Hestram puts the scroll down, puts rocks on each end, and is about to open the last one when--

Voice: Commander!

Hestram looks to his upper left in astonishment

The lieutenant comes running down some stairs from a passage with a big wooden door with 4 other soldiers

Lieutenant: Commander! What did you find? We're out of luck; it's empty up there.

Hestram: (begins to walk toward the lieutenant) We found 3 scrolls, one of them being a map to Darus' castle!

Lieutenant: Where is it?

Hestram point to the table with the skeleton and 2 opened scrolls with rocks keeping them open, and another closed scroll

The lieutenant runs over and starts looking at them with his torch

Hestram: (walks over) We were about to open this last one when you arrived.

Lieutenant: This is indeed Darus' castle. I cannot tell what this one is; maybe the other abandonded fort.

Hestram: That's what Darus said it might be.

Darus/Wolf: What are all these pirates here for?

Lieutenant: Prisoners. I left charge of this castle, since they were trapped inside. We couldn't let them out for fear they'd hunt us down and kill us.

Darus/Wolf: Why couldn't you just shoot them if you opened the doorway?

Lieutenant: They kept a guard up all night and day. Other pirates were apt to rescue their partners, so we killed them when they got close to the passage on the stairwall, and threw them inside.

Hestram: Why didn't you tell me there was a passage there before I left?

Lieutenant: You left too quickly. I figured you'd be smart enough to find it.

Hestram: A dead pirate fell on Darus, gave us a small scare.

Lieutenant: You'll live.

Hestram: Anyway, about the pirates you threw into the passage, how did you kill them?

Lieutenant: (looks at Hestram seriously) We banged them against the wall with clubs.

Darus/Wolf: That's why there was blood on the wall...

Cuts to one of the soldiers that was with the lieutenant

Soldier: That must be why this is here!

Soldier points his torch to his right, showing about 25 skeletons lined up on the ground

Hestram: (walks forward a bit) What is this?!

Lieutenant: The pirates in here must've...lined them up like this after they were thrown in.

Darus/Wolf: And starved over time.

Hestram: (looks disgusted) Lieutenant, you take a look at that map I was about to open, I'm going back to my horse outside. Darus, would you like to come back with me?

Darus/Wolf: I'll come in a while.

Hestram waves, runs to the opening, and crawls through

Cuts to the wolf walking over to the lieutenant who has started to inspect the maps again

Lieutenant: What's your reason to stay?

Darus/Wolf: I want to know your name. Hestram never calls you by name, just "Lieutenant." He said he'd tell me later, but I want to know now.

Lieutenant: (looks back at the wolf, then looks at the map again) Ecglaf.

Darus/Wolf: (looks at the lieutenant for 4 seconds in astonishment) You!

Cuts to lieutenant's face having an uncomfortable expression, then cuts back to Darus' face

Darus/Wolf: You're that traitor who sold information to Hestram!

Lieutenant: Please... It's over and we're going to be allies soon--

Wolf interrupts

Darus/Wolf: You layed the building blocks for Hestram's campaign!

Lieutenant: What's it to you anymore?! I'm your friend now.

Darus/Wolf: It helps to know why Hestram never told me your name.

Lieutenant: Because you would reject me.

Darus/Wolf: I don't reject you, I just know more about you now.

Lieutenant: Darus, you did reject me then, and the thought of it will remain with you. It doesn't matter if I'm an ally that helps you in your battles or your wars, but your personal view of my past crimes will never be forgotten! It is best that you do not speak to me again.

Wolf looks at the lieutenant with surprise

Lieutenant: Just go.

Darus/Wolf: Bu--

Lieutenant interrupts

Lieutenant: GO!

Wolf backs away a bit, still looking sorrowful at the lieutenant who never took his eyes off the map when talking

Wolf turns and walks out of the room to the outside

Cuts to Hestram sitting by his horse with his coat off, and then noticing the wolf come out of the opening

Hestram: Darus! Come, sit with me!

Wolf quickly runs toward Hestram and slows down when close, then sits on Hestram's right

Hestram: Darus? Darus, what's wrong?

Darus/Wolf: I was told who your lieutenant was.

Hestram: Oh yeah, Ecglaf. Yeah, he was a traitor, but he's on your side again so cheer up.

Darus/Wolf: He wishes not to speak with me again.

Hestram: He gets a bit moody at times; he'll change.

Darus/Wolf: Perhaps...

Cuts to view of Hestram and Darus sitting together 8 feet away from the camera

Camera slowly changes from that shot to the lieutenant walking over to Hestram; still nighttime

Lieutenant: Commander, the map you had me look over is a map of the Gildur castle. There is a secret passage at the western part of the wall, but most likely guarded by at least 20 men, which would be up here. (points to section on map showing a large turret tower next to the passage)

Hestram: Our archers can handle that. Any other challenges?

Hestram and the lieutenant laugh for 3 seconds

Lieutenant: Nothing else. It'll take some time to take it.

Hestram: Do I look worried?

Lieutenant smiles and looks down

Hestram: Let's attack now.

Lieutenant: Now commander?? The men are--

Hestram: Tonight we have a great chance! If there was a single soul who saw us pass their fort, they'd expect us to rest until morning!

Lieutenant: Commander, the men are tired and too weak to fight.

Hestram: Do we have water?

Lieutenant: Yes, why?

Hestram: Tell every man that he must wash his face so that they'll be active enough to fight.

Lieutenant: I can't do that, commander.

Hestram: What did you call me?

Lieutenant: Commander. (looks confused) Wha--

Hestram interrupts

Hestram: You're commander has given you a command! Why do you not obey?

Lieutenant: The men are expecting to rest until morning. Telling them to fight now would cause trouble.

Hestram: Nevermind. I'll give the order myself.

Hestram walks away toward the soldiers who have started to make their tents

Hestram: (yells) Men!

Everyone stops what they're doing and looks at Hestram

Hestram: (yells) Your orders are to cease you tent-making, and to get ready for battle! Wash your faces, so that you'll be more active to fight!

Men start to take their tents down and wash their faces

Lieutenant runs up to Hestram from behind and watches the men do what Hestram said

Lieutenant: How--

Hestram interrupts

Hestram: I told them before that this would be the order, and threw in an extra 50 gold pieces just for preventing trouble.

Lieutenant: I was never informed of this order! And besides how could you announce this to everyone without me hearing?

Hestram: You were busy sleeping in your tent.

Darus/Wolf: I saw you enter your tent when Hestram ran off to tell the men something.

Both look at the wolf, surprised to see he's listening next to them

Hestram: Where've you been?

Darus/Wolf: Sitting next to your horse. When do we leave?

Hestram: Now.

Lieutenant: The men are still busy packing their tents.

Hestram: They'll be ready soon. I'll go get my coat.

Lieutenant: I'll be getting my sword on now.

Darus/Wolf: I'll--

Hestram and lieutenant walk away

Darus/Wolf: (looks at self) ....... I'll.... watch the men make their tents.

Wolf looks toward the army; cuts to the army finishing packing their tents and camera slowly changes from the shot of the army to Hestram riding with the army behind him; shows wolf walking along side Hestram

Army begins to approach Gildur

Hestram raises his hand for the army to halt when about half a mile away from the fort

Hestram: (yells) I want 200 to follow me to the fort! The rest, stay close, but not within range of any archers! I want 40 archers on that hill there, and when I show a flame signal, fire!

Cuts to lieutenant hearing this and repeating to the soldiers farther away

Cuts back to Hestram, who takes a glimpse of the fort, and looks back at the soldiers

Hestram: All of you in front, line up!

About 240 soldiers line up; Hestram walks up to the right end of the line

Hestram: (points at soldiers) You, you, you, you...

Cuts to wolf turning head slightly at each person Hestram points to

Camera slowly changes from the wolf to Hestram running through the dark with the wolf; cuts to 4 men running, holding shields around a man with a torch inside with a shield roof, the edges glowing a bit

Cuts to the man inside running as well while sweating from the closed space he's in with the torch, then wiping his forehead with his sleeve

Cuts to Hestram running with some men beside him; cuts to running vision of coming very close to the fort wall

Cuts to Hestram and his 200 men arriving at the wall, unseen

Cuts to a guard walking around slowly at the turret tower above the place where Hestram and his men are

Guard stops, notices something from below

Cuts to Hestram who looks up

Cuts back to guard who peers over the ledge

Cuts to Hestram; Hestram fires at the guard with his crossbow; guard is hit in the stomach and cries softly, then falls over the ledge

Cuts to another guard who looks over to where the other guard used to stand

Guard: Turgon? Turgon where are you?

Hestram: (looks back) NOW!

Guards take their shields away from the torch and reveals a flash of light

Cuts to Lieutenant who sees the torch

Lieutenant: (calls to his right) The signal is up; fire at will!!

Cuts to archers who fire first at the guard who noticed the other guard was gone

Cuts to soldiers firing in the dark

Cuts to Hestram looking up, then at the wolf, then at the wall

Hestram: (talking to himself) Where's the passage?!

Looks furiously at the wall and presses against it, trying to find the passage

Soldier: Commander, more soldiers are approaching the tower! What do we do now?!

Hestram: (talking to self) Where is it??!!

Cuts to the wall; cuts to Hestram and the wall from a side view; Hestram puts his hands on the wall and moves them across, pushing every second

Soldier: Commander we don't have much time!!

Hestram: Wait!

Cuts to Hestram's hands on the wall; Hestram pushes the wall from a different angle and it starts to slide in

Soldier: Commander the--

Hestram interrupts

Hestram: The wall is moving!

Wall slowly creaks open wide after about 4 seconds

Hestram: Let's go!

Soldiers yell triumphantly and charge into the passage

Cuts to inside of fort to soldier in uniform like Lieutenant Ecglaf's

Soldier: Commander, the men have broken through the secret passage and are heading toward your quarters! We must call in the troops or evacuate!

Cuts to the commander who stands up, but camera only shows from his chest down, not revealing his face

Commander: We must undergo both options! I must evacuate! You call in the troops!!

Soldier: Yes commander!

Soldier runs out the door; camera stays at the door and a scream and bump on the floor is heard; in walks Hestram with the wolf

Cuts to Hestram's face who looks in surprise at the commander, realizing who it is...

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Please post opinions on how the story is going.

--Truman

[hawkeye]

WOW how many more parts are there

[strike wolf]

keep it up.