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jiminski wrote:Thank you William, nice work mate!
i am not quite sure what to do though. I should've been more specific regarding length perhaps. I have now clarified the parameters regarding the length of the passage. (100 - 200 words)
By chance or taking some note of my passage length, most of the authors have written around 150 words.
This kind of length makes it quite easy for people to casually beat out a quick work of condensed artist genius without it becoming to much a labour of love (which yours surely was!).
It also means that the story can develop gradually at the hand of lots of various authors; with the 'people' choosing the best penned plot development.
So, I feel bad to ask as you have put in so much effort but would you like to take out a section between 100 and 200 words to enter as your first Passage? - in the meantime i will do this for you. If you do wish to edit it, i will re-post it for you.
jim
Edit: actually your cut-down version works very nicely and if you win you can post another passage straight away.
InkL0sed wrote:I've decided not to write anything this week.
jiminski wrote:InkL0sed wrote:I've decided not to write anything this week.
that is a shame Ink, I was looking forward to reading it... any reason?
InkL0sed wrote:
I feel like continuing a storyline, rather than starting one, that's all.
Curmudgeonx wrote:8 years ago
It was too painful to move. A pain, similar in texture as a hundred times before, the queasy stomach, the buzzing sensation that made his ears hot like the proverbial plague of locusts were scurrying across the front of his head. Eventually the eyes opened due to the bile rising in his gullet and the overfull bladder demanding that he move, and move pretty fucking quick. Lurching up and over the side of the bed into a three point stance, gaining momentum towards the hallway and the bathroom down at the end.
Progress was being made, certain areas of the body, now sated, lapsed again into unconsciousness. The brain still burned, periodically flinching from memories of the night before, frantic memories, sizzling and crossing his mind like meteors preceding Armageddon. Impacts leaving craters to be filled with guilt and longing. Why, he asked himself, why is this the normal progression of my life? What were others doing this morning? Already at work at their gray painted pressboard desks, swapping stories about sitcoms with the other fucking drones. Truly believing that everything was right in the world, that with patience, luck, and the appropriate amount of ass-kissing and maneuvering, that they would reach the nirvana of success. Whatever that may be for each respective drone.
amazzony wrote:This is one great thread and the stories are amazing! As they are all wonderful, I have troubles voting so how long do I have time to do re-read them and decide?
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